Wednesday, September 21, 2011


The walls were closing in on me; the room was getting darker and I could feel my body temperature drop to dangerously low levels. The ceiling looked as if it was falling closer and closer to me every second.  I was slowly running out of space and my fear paralized me.  All types of creepy crawlers came out of every nook and cranny and surrounded me.  All electronics turned on and only had one motive, to get me.  Every one of my fears were coming to life right in front of me and I could do nothing about it.  I was thought I was done for, but then something amazing happend, I woke up.  I turned off my alarm in relief, got dressed, brushed my teeth, put my deoderant on, walked down the stairs and headed off to school.


  1. GOOD- descriptive

    BAD- elaborate more on the ending

  2. Good use of descriptive words. However, the ending could use more detail.